Winner---->HOLLOW VS. DAFI aka doughboy

[dafi]

niggas listen
when i spit a verse
it aint rehearsed
its straight from the brain
newly obtained
im that newcomer on the come up
the kid niggas highly acclaim
after i do my thang
youll feel like a virgin
for the first time doing cocaine
"what the fuck did i just do?"
kid you dont know
what you got yourself into
you like that white kid from jumanji
hollow holla at ya daddy
my rap skills is uncanny
beyond what is natural
it might sound impossible
but if i wanted to bitch
i can rhyme every syllable
and thats the truth
i never tattle
cept the time i told your girl
she sucks like theres no tommorow
i sniffed the lello off her asshole
then she played flute with my southpole
yea im a truant
my boys girl dont me around him
says im a bad influent
the difference between me and you?
my verse is gold solid
yours is hollow
im a rap general
leading street souljas
leaving niggas in need of air supply
making rap out of nothing at all
straight up, game done
i just sunk the eight ball
corey miller, the attack is over
stop hiding under cover
and lets see you murder

[Hollow]

You ain't hard, you jus' listen to that shit on stereo, so normally I'd pass it up/
But this time I'ma shoot through those car tunes, an' watch Dafi duck/
You gotta have skill to beat me, an' so far none o' ya tracks have it/
So ya best bet's to kick rocks quicker than recoverin' crack addicts/
When it comes to words, you can't survive Hollows ~ they fly through ya head, son/
So fuckin' fast, leave you wonderin' if I was typin' wit' a hand-gun/
You don't belong here, like an' outcast ejected from his home land/
An' when I got you under-fire, you get left wet like a snowman/
I'll leave ya whole block lit up hotter than the sun in summer/
A lyrical Jim Carrey, his verses jus' go from Dum to Dummer/
I'll get under ya skin, man, I'm one o' the best in the business/
Blessed in this business, Mr. Hollow in the flesh, teachin' lessons to these bitches/
Infested wit' sickness, hypocritical by natural, 'cause I simply live for killin'/
Writin' dirty fuckin' verses that need an immediate cure 'cause my penicillin/ (pen is illin')
I craft wordplay at unholy lengths, you could say I metaphorically sinned-the-size/ (synthesize)
An' my verse hit his pupils, an' at the same time I still mysticize/ (missed his eyes)

There's a SHITLOAD more wordplay, metaphors, etc. than I bolded. I just bolded a couple I thought people might not notice off the top.

Time for votes.

[dafi]

lol im gon need it

[Hollow]

By the way, I spelled dum and dummer wrong purposely... Just so there's no commenting on that, I figured I'd clarify now.

[Hollow]

In the thread I made? This same verse. Then I realized that you'd already made a thread for the battle, so I cut it and moved it here. Then I editted it, 'cause I'd said "Dafi, good luck, you're up" and changed it to "Time for votes" 'cause you'd already went before me.

[E-Rip]

IMO it was a kida one-sided, dafi, your verse was all over the place man. A lot of it didn't really rhyme..at all. Your structure was off, and well all in all I just wasn't feelin your verse man. Then again, Hollow is a beast, pretty tough opponent for your first battle here. Hollow's verse hit hard and was solid all the way through. The wordplay was there, nameplay, and all the other necessary elements. That is why I feel Hollow took this battle. Dafi, work a little more on developing your structure, make your bars a bit longer, work on focusing more on the punchlines, personals, wordplay, nameplay and less on self-praising; which I learned doesn't get you anywhere in a battle. So keep it up man and elevate.

VOTE- Hollow

[dafi]

ye i gotta work on writing.. im more a live freestyler.. thats why my bars are short.. ill take your advice on the next episode

[dafi]

anybody catch any of the wordplays i had?

[dafi]

next voter do the category stuff.. i wanna see if i atleast won in any

[Hollow]

For what it's worth, I saw some of the wordplay. I thought the South Pole comment was actually kinda funny.

[2BiZzy]

Opener- hollow
Punches- hollow
Flow- tie...
Nameplay- none
Similies/Meta's- hollow
Personals- hollow
Creativity- tie
Humor- dafi

Enjoyment- hollow

Favorite Lines: Hollow:Infested wit' sickness, hypocritical by natural, 'cause I simply live for killin'/
Writin' dirty fuckin' verses that need an immediate cure 'cause my penicillin
Dafi:im that newcomer on the come up
the kid niggas highly acclaim
after i do my thang
youll feel like a virgin
for the first time doing cocaine
Over-All = hollow

Vote = hollow

but just know this....u were up against 1 of tha best so u can onLy learn from this yo...nice verses to both of u guys

[Vega/Set]

Opener- hollow
Punches- hollow
Flow- hollow (it wasnt simplistic like dafi's was)
Nameplay- Hollow (his attempt was better)
Similies/Meta's- hollow
Personals- hollow
Creativity-hollow
Humor- dafi (i wont explain why)



Hollow defintly wins this one....dafi u need mad elevation ma dude..no hate but jus observe how other ppl are doin it n learn from it then battle i wanna see more punchlines n personals comin from u


Vote = Hollow



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