Freeda vs. Set<----WINNER

[Vega/Set]

40-48 Lines

first to 3 votes wins

votes must be explained or they wont count

Check-in first

no time limit after check in only because its the holidays n people are goin places--so jus let me kno


TOPIC = Effects of Heroin

[Enzo R.]

Check in...although i didn't see this coming...and nah, i aint goin nowhere...

[Vega/Set]

Check-in....o and thank your brother for settin this up then...i thought u knew

[Vega/Set]

*gunshots go off*.............................................. ..



Now that i got the paper no hater can keep me back//
just do me the favor of supplyin me heroin or even that crack//
it took me 5 hours to find someone wit enough money//
and wen i found her i busted her back---im sorry hunny//
i hate to laugh but its funny to me now that i can get what i need//
Just thinkin bout that adrenline rush--oooh man its like fuckin speed//
so help me please--where the fuck is this man, where the hell can he be//
Lord help me find him--c'mon im on my knees--i jus need this, need this now//
indeed the lord has helped me cause i see him--yes theres my pal//


Hey man can you hook me up wit that shit that got me shook n stuff//
sure bro jus look, dont touch--then tell me just how much//
i jus need enough to get me by on a high that lasts about a month//
hahaha my ni66a you must be pumped--but here you go, heres that dump//
thanks again--i'll be sure to come back wen i need some more...............//

*gunshots*

Fuck you motherfucker gimme that junk--ripped me off, i take your score//
no need to call the ambulance i can already pronounce his dead on the floor//
look at that head shot--that blood pour.....man im still trippin off las nite//
o shit sirens--time ta lace the nikes (ni-ks) n get ta dippin on 44………//
shit i hope im safe--hope im in the clear and outta that chase..//
.....damn that mus be real good shit i can feel my heart race to pace//
mayb i should take some more then--to the point i cant feel my face.....//
now what did I do wit that needle…fuck it I’ll jus use one of the dealers//
aw man they aint nothing better then injectin heroin an feelin her//
shit I guess it turned out to be a good thing I was stealin her//
mayb if I take it all at once I can get high enough to reach heaven….//
but first I gotta get to a secluded spot n jus let this shit set innnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn……………………//
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--…..another in the books—I gotta another to become a crook//
like im Hitler and im turning these ni66as on there family—I got em shook//
got there souls to come wit me matta fact once they saw me I had it took//
now look—victim number—fuck I lost count ever since the past million slumbers//
I hit hard—like rocks to witches or even like ben n his kite I come in like thunder//
Make bitches turn on there husbands and bastards turn on there wives//
Cause multiple deaths with the help of sharp edges but it aint knives//
Take lives like with the help of aids-- even use the barter system—me and a kid for trade//
Shit I even help out who I kill by getting them paid—so call me evil//
But im not the one who tells you to fuck me or not wash that dirty needle//
Pray to god to help find your dealer when really it’s the devils help bitch//
Shit he the one that brought me here too but he didn’t make me selfish//
I go around like door handles or hoes round the block that’s hotter then cambells// (soup)
I make you see shit you only see in nightmares boy so don’t think im jus a hand held// (a toy)
Im damn felt—felt more then hands on a dick—more involved wit me then your own chick//
Shit im like superman cept I aint savin lives im helping people die//
livin life, findin prey like a lion in the jungle-- then i just zer-o in//
its funny how im a woman into villiany makes ya wonder why my name is her-o-in//*



*heroin- its the name of a woman superhero
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[Enzo R.]

I lay in there...wondering what will become of me at once it seeps...
In deep into my hunger for this drug that seems so lov-ely- -
A lust that runs between my lungs in each-n-every huff I breathe- -
And suddenly I feel a rush increase and cease my functioning- -
I’m mumbling a bunch of nothing under rum my tongue conceives- -
Nothing seems to be conducting dreams from what I see- -
Of course, it’s just the weed...the heroin ain’t enter yet- -
I dared my friend to get it and inject his neck - And then I’m next- -
But then regret it once the pendant pierced into my skin- -
And sheared the liquid in me worst than hallucinogens- -
All within my system spewed solutions like induced contusions- -
As I view illusions fuse the room with confusing movements- -
Doomed to be another human ceased but loving what I’ve done- -
It’s something of this drug more luscious than a blunt- -
Hunched against my back - The sky ignites and burns in flames- -
Is this the high or worst-the pain that is derived from nerves and rage- -
My mind conserves a gauge that may define a murdered face- -
I turn away but nervously I watch the light of Pearly Gates- -
Why’s it worsening...Is this the truth or blatant views I’m waging- -
Or hallucinations where I choose engagement with a ruger patron - -
With the cases till I taste a gat and aim mine back- -
My hate contracts like age and acts without my sane with great attacks- -
Insanely laugh the time a blade’s attached within my fists- -
I vision rifts and waves within a minute I’ve just split a kid- -
And with his ribs I sticked the pins within an infants innocense- -
With inches of my ignorance inflicted in a woman’s lips- -
While ligaments of spit and piss is covering her husband- -
Uttering “My son...” but shut him up when suddenly my gun-spits- -
Just one clip...The blood drips...His son? Shit, I love this- -
With one hit the drug did this much? Shit, I lust this- -
Well fuck this...I run quick into the darkness - Find the needle- -
Finally yo...Bind the evil with the finest weed in my cerebral- -
I lie in peace so I can see more shiny eagles- -
Guys with kilo’s - Lines of sweet coke...My sinus needs those- -
Like a wife that deep-throats...I reach for a Mac-10- -
“You’ve been a bad friend” I had said before I blasted- -
I ain’t a crackhead - But if you had I’d grab it and practice- -
My actions are mad quick - Too fast for the average- -
I break apart a set of bars -Watching crowds set apart- -
Is that a narc? - He sped his car ahead and set alarms- -
He thinks I dread him dawg? - “Put ya weapon down and raise ya arms”- -
I’m playing strong and spray it all until a stray engraves his heart- -
Because my sane is gone - My aim’s to make it safe till morn- -
But now there’s pain along...my gaze is in a daze of harm- -
I lay with a gauge’s scar engraved in my brain - It’s painless- -
My sane hits back like the stainless stray did - Notice the cop erases- -
I lay stiff but hold a chrome and notice my home in a glance - -
With my parents, friend, and baby brother dead...by my own ruthless hands...

[Vega/Set]

vote up ppl

[StAyLOE07]

hhahha dam both of yah verse is o.d hot but let me start my vote

opener = set
multies = freeda
flow = freeda
meta = set
storyline = tie
closer = set
enjoyment = set

my vote goes to set becuz his verse was mo on point n plus like how he started off with tha use of heroin after them verse its tha effect of heroin,but i ain't gonna stunt though freeda verse was crazy too his multies n flow was crazy just that i didn't really see his point of usin heroin n tha effect both did good though like this topical battle..1

[Vega/Set]

thanks for voting..keep em coming

[Vega/Set]

Uppin for more votes on this

[Vega/Set]

needs votes ppl!!!!

[Boss_Smoke]

Vega -- though your bars were good, in the sense of the story you were telling, the flow was off. They seemed stretched because you were telling that story, but you should be able to use less words in them. Otherwise, that first verse with the dealer and all that was real good. I'm kinda on the fence for the next one, it was alright, but didn't say much or display much for me. Thouugh that closing bar was good :wink:

Freeda -- shit Freeda, that was wow. It started off--off to me. You were writing the bars, and they didn't seem like anything was being said. Though you were saying things, they just ain't mean anything special to me. BUT then, you went off. The rest of that verse was unbelievable--the flow was perfect, the rhymes were all flawless, and the story, was wow.

When I, read topicals. What I usually look for is immersion, the ability to hold me in a grip in what you're writing. Each bar more menacing then the next, each bar daring me to read the next. I don't even look so much on the flow, or the actual rhymes, I look to be immersed in the words. And when I look at this battle, I noticed both verses really did that. This was a real good battle, but I gotta give a vote.

Vote -- Freeda

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[Vega/Set]

1-1 still uppin 4 votes

[krayz1e b1zzy]

these ratings are outta 5, with 5 being the most:

**SET:
opener = 4
multies = 3
flow = 4.5
meta = 3
storyline = 5
closer = 4.5
enjoyment = 4.5
TOTAL: 28.5

**FREEDA5TH:
opener = 3.5
multies = 4
flow = 5
meta = 2.5
storyline= 4
closer = 4
enjoyment = 4
TOTAL: 27

Comments: In my opinion this was a good battle, i just think that 40 bars was kinda too long. Set's story line i got more into than Freedas, but Freeda striked back with the flow. But since this is a topical i had to rely more on the story so basically i give it to Set because he had a slightly stronger storyline , but just by a "TITT" lol

Vote: SET

[Vega/Set]

thanks 4 voting

2-1


still uppin 4 votes though

[Enzo R.]

cool, i liked the way kb voted...thanks for takin ya time guys...

[krayz1e b1zzy]

cool, i liked the way kb voted...thanks for takin ya time guys...
thanx free

[Vega/Set]

Uppin 4 votes

[E-Rip]

Ok ok let me finish off the voting so we can complete this battle.

I have to give this one to Set because of the story, I felt more compelled to keep reading the next line and see how it ends. With yours Freeda, I mean the verse was sick all around, multis were vicious, but I just couldn't really get into it seeing that it's a topical battle n all. It did get better towards the end, because in the beginning parts, I was just reading and reading and not really focused on a story here.

So basically Set takes this one because of the story he had, the ending was great. Freeda your verse was sick, but it just didn't do it for me "story-wise" for this topical.
So props to both of you on a great battle.

VOTE= Set

[Vega/Set]

Ight cool..thanks for voting all......and freeda another good battle my nig

[Enzo R.]

indeed...