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luvBONE12
01-15-2004, 08:15 PM
this started off as a poem that i wrote to release some stress, but
then somehow i attempted to turn it to a song. it's already copyrighted (like all my poems) but i
might wanna do somethin else with it. tell me wut'cha
think.

............................................

You Weren't There For
Me



1st Verse:

i thought we were forever.
was that not the
plan?
were we not meant to walk
while holding hands?

i said you were all that i
needed.
you vowed to stay by my side.
who would've thought you'd change your
mind
and walk out of my life.

when you said you loved me
was it just to make me
smile?
what makes you think
that it's okay
to turn away
and walk right
out


Chorus:

how dare you say
that you always
cared for
me?

when i was down
you weren't around
you weren't there for me.

i
dried my eyes
and realized
you don't care about me

'cause when i was
down
you weren't around
you weren't there for me.


2nd Verse:

i
thought you were my world.
i placed no one above you,
and you know that anything
you asked
of me i would do.

I felt you were my life,
but you went away,
and
even though i'm still breathing
it's not the same.

what happened to our
connection,
that bond we sewed?
your heart has froze.
how could you throw
our
love away
and just let go?


Chorus:

how dare you say
that you
always
cared for me?

when i was down,
you weren't around.
you weren't
there for me.

i dried my eyes
and realized
you don't care about
me.

'cause when i was down,
you weren't around.
you weren't there for
me.

Last Words:

i'm still in love with you
so my heart won't let this
rest,
though i know that you weren't true
and you refuse to give me your
best.

just give me one reason
why you withdrew your love.
don't give me your
lies, boy,
'cause i've had enough.

i try to convince myself
that your love's not
gone.

but i've taken to much of this
and it's time to move on.


Chorus:


how dare you say
that you always
cared for me?

when i was
down,
you weren't around.
you weren't there for me.

i dried my eyes
and
realized
you don't care about me.

'cause when i was down,
you weren't
around.
you weren't there for me.



_ALC

Lyrikal Curse
01-16-2004, 02:34 PM
Damn Thats Nice Gurl Keep It
Up......555555555

xCasperx
02-26-2004, 04:11 AM
its good, but is it a ryme or like a
pop rock song. I couldn't catch the beat, but the flow is nice. Maybe try making your line a
little longer. Very nice tho.

ladybonethugs
02-26-2004, 02:40 PM
Butter!!! Real tight!!! Keep it
Thugish Ruggish!!!
-Harmony

luvBONE12
02-26-2004, 06:20 PM
its good, but is it a ryme or like a pop rock song. I couldn't
catch the beat, but the flow is nice. Maybe try making your line a little longer. Very nice
tho.


thanks, all for the replies.
i'm glad you liked it.

it's not pop rock, and if by "a rhyme" you mean rap, it's not that
either. actually, it has a slow beat. :sing: