Winner Keeburna ~~~~~~~~~~~ Scar Revolutionary

[Vega/Set]

House Rules:
Each nominated battle will be of the following format:
Challenger goes first
1 round
16-18 bars
3-0 = KO
4-1 = TKO
First to 5 wins, must win by 2 or more votes
People must have at least 100 posts in order to vote
Both battlers must agree to the challenge before it is started


Keeburna you are lower on the list then Rev. so you must go first

You have 48 hours to post -- good luck to you both
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[keeburna]

all right let me get this started

mic check i'm ready to go, the eruption bout blow, want a revolution i say no/
this fool cant touch on my flow, dog you aint nothing but fake/
i'll cut your body in pieces spread them in my garden with my rake/
you like a vampire and i'm piercing a stake, cast your body into hell/
visit your family to see if there doing well, but instead of mourning they partying they doin swell/
i seen your other battle man i voted for you, i don't know why though i guess i felt sorry for you, but at least you tried, it was ok, naw it really wasn't i guess i lied/
so your name is revolution tell me what do you wanna change/
oh, you a gay actavist trying to get married and take another mans last name/
tell me man what do you wanna do, i breath fire and brimbstone your time is due/
time for you to end and vanish from the earth, they should have just killed you the day your momma gave birth/
i'm the heat and you like the spurs, i'm winning championships and you disapearing in a blur, bloody murder man yeah thats what i bring, don't worry though i promise it wont sting/
so i sit here waiting to see your reply, wondering why, man you shouldn't even try/
seeing your word brings a tear to my eye/
its your time to fall and my time to sore/
i should amputate your arms so you cant type anymore....

i'm out da arsonist

[Longway]

Rev you are up -- you have 24 hours

[Revolutionary]

yo u try n battle me, u a fish outta water/
u gunna get dished, cuz i spit a freestyle better than anything u ever thought of/
ya rhymes too simple go against this,i spit n have u explode like a pimple/
cuz my rhymes hit ya like a sawed off, leave holes in ya like a dimple/
and watch ya body get brought off... the crime scene,u could call me a rhyme machine/
go against my flown n u get beat everytime, its mean/
you nice like nick cannon,so nigga u cant spit /
my rhymes hit u like a cannon n sink ya ship/
ima send u home cuz i own u like real estate/
come bac to battle wen u grown, cuz now i sealed ya fate/
i was jus too much , u cant fuck wit the rhymes i create/
i got a flow niggas cant touch, so u stuck wit losin, fuck the votes, no need 2 wait/
winner revolutionary~~~~~scar~~~~~~Keeburna/
eat garbage mcs 4 dinner,hoped u learned ya-/
lesson, if u did, ull probaly never text-again/
wat u spit dont really matter cuz i jus needed to step on ya face to get higher on the ladder/

[Revolutionary]

Votes please

[Boss_Smoke]

Alright, keeburna, you seemingly tried to fit as many words possible in a few bars, when heeping it shorter may help sometimes. Rev, I'm not even sure what to say about that....Both verses left me wanting more, because both didn't seem up to par. When it comes to punches, I'd go with keeburna. Flow, I'd go with Rev because of those long ass bars used in kee's verse. Overall, I'ma go with kee's, because he rhymed slightly better, and his punches hit slightly harder.

VOTE : KEEBURNA

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[Longway]

1-0 Keeburna

[Vega/Set]

im not gonna take the time to break down the bars cuz honestly this battle doesnt need it.....first off i wood like to add that wen u are creatin your verse, b4 u submit plz look at how many bars u have cuz if they aint enough im gonna notice, now kee u got luccy cuz u jus one bar off mayb if u didnt strecth ya bars out u might have had more but since i was goin off on wut u marked as a bar i only counted 15--people theres a reason me n sal put tha house rules in each thread plz read them--now as for the battle itself, i wont make u add a bar or do another verse kee seeing as how u were one off wen u cooda had more in sum of the bars but try not to do it again;

kee came wit average shit this battle, i ve seen u do a hella of alot betta than this man...u flow was forced n ya punches were average..ididnt really see u tryna get personal at all and again u stretched a couple bars; and rev man wow u really need to elevate u didnt come hard at all, im not tryna diss u but man wen u come into battle u gotta b ready wit sum heat..u got 24-48 hours to think off ways to fucc wit your opponet for example u had all the time and u cooda fuccd wit his name a bit..or made fun of the bunny in his sig..u gotta get real personal in these battles and makin bars funny dont hurt either, jus try thangs--we provide u guys the time to come creative and decent.....use that time wisely



Vote= Keeburna

[Longway]

2-0 Keeburna

[Vega/Set]

Sal u gonna vote on this?

[Matty_Bone]

Im gonna have to go for kee on this on too. His verse was aiming for more direct punches on Rev, whereas Rev was rapping about himself a lot using my rhymes and my lyrics to put his point across.
Overall it was a good battle i enjoyed reading through both.
Well dont guys.
Vote = Keeburna, kepp that flame lit mayne.

[aLiAs R.I.P.08]

Da Arsonist

mic check i'm ready to go, the eruption bout blow, want a revolution i say no/
1/1 - nameplay/personal got the point
this fool cant touch on my flow, dog you aint nothing but fake/
i'll cut your body in pieces spread them in my garden with my rake/
1/2 - point for attempt, weak setup and wording
you like a vampire and i'm piercing a stake, cast your body into hell/
visit your family to see if there doing well, but instead of mourning they partying they doin swell/
1/2 - no, no, no, the second line was just bad, point for punch attempt
i seen your other battle man i voted for you, i don't know why though i guess i felt sorry for you, but at least you tried,
it was ok, naw it really wasn't i guess i lied/
0/2 - wat was that?
so your name is revolution tell me what do you wanna change/
oh, you a gay actavist trying to get married and take another mans last name/
0/2 - just overall a weak setup, bad flow, stretched bar, uncreative punch out of a played concept
tell me man what do you wanna do, i breath fire and brimbstone your time is due/
time for you to end and vanish from the earth, they should have just killed you the day your momma gave birth/
1/2 - point for attempt and alright flow
i'm the heat and you like the spurs,
i'm winning championships and you disapearing in a blur
1/1 - punch attempt
bloody murder man yeah thats what i bring
don't worry though i promise it wont sting/
0/1 - filler and a half
so i sit here waiting to see your reply, wondering why, man you shouldn't even try/
seeing your word brings a tear to my eye/
0/2 - filler
its your time to fall and my time to sore/
i should amputate your arms so you cant type anymore....
1/2 - ur only bar that had potential, point for punch attempt, bad closer

6/17 = 35%

G.GE

yo u try n battle me, u a fish outta water/
u gunna get dished, cuz i spit a freestyle better than anything u ever thought of/
1/2 - punch attempt, lacked creativity
ya rhymes too simple go against this,i spit n have u explode like a pimple/
cuz my rhymes hit ya like a sawed off, leave holes in ya like a dimple/
1/2 - weak setup, played concepts
and watch ya body get brought off... the crime scene,u could call me a rhyme machine/
go against my flown n u get beat everytime, its mean/
1/2 - point for flow/setup, no punch attempt
you nice like nick cannon,so nigga u cant spit /
my rhymes hit u like a cannon n sink ya ship/
1/2 - point for punch attempt
ima send u home cuz i own u like real estate/
come bac to battle wen u grown, cuz now i sealed ya fate/
1/2 - potential line, attempt at punch gets point, more creativity needed
i was jus too much , u cant fuck wit the rhymes i create/
i got a flow niggas cant touch, so u stuck wit losin, fuck the votes, no need 2 wait/
1/2 - first line associating with second, second line personal attempt
winner revolutionary~~~~~scar~~~~~~Keeburna/
eat garbage mcs 4 dinner,hoped u learned ya-/
1/2 - first line personal attempt, second line filler
lesson, if u did, ull probaly never text-again/
0/1 - filler
wat u spit dont really matter cuz i jus needed to step on ya face to get higher on the ladder/
1/1 - attempt at punch get point

8/16 = 1/2 = 50%

VOTE - Revolutionary

***alright, from wat i see in this battle, you both are, at the moment, at a very low level, kee, you coming back made me expect something from you, no creativity, no punches worth of a battle, stretched lines destroying the flow, no, just no, rev, are you getting lazy? only reason you got points is because you attempted punches, but none were worth a second look, i don't even feel like coming back to this thread, i'm sorry but if i don't tell you guys how horrible your effort was now, who will? i dunno if this just wasnt any of your days or you were in a rush, but i dont really want to get down to the excuses, you both did bad in this battle, i layed my vote down, perhaps even wasted my time breaking it down, but if i didn't, how would you know what you need to improve, i have to say some of same things every time, and it seems it's not going through ya heads, kee ur a first, BUT, you guys better step it up, peace

p.s. if you think i'm tryna diss both of you, you better believe it, you guys might need the motivation, i have seen much much better effort from both competitors, think about that

[Vega/Set]

im pretty sure tha battle was ova before ur post alias..unless sal wants to not accept one of tha votes....thats tha only reason i left it open

[Revolutionary]

like nobody cares if u take mad time to come up wit tha verse?? i thought we was jus supposed to go off the dome like a real battle in person, and like if u take time to write a verse its frowned on lol.... fuck lol... guess ima take time now lol

[Vega/Set]

...ummm......hmmmmm...........ugh...uhhhhh.






























































wat?...





neway..y tha hell u think we give u a time limit on ya battles, its not for our health..we do it so u can come up wit decent shit that doesnt hurt peoples eyes wen they read it

[aLiAs R.I.P.08]

well w/e then if it was finished already, kee wins KO, i didnt check to see who voted and who got the votes

and rev, i kno what ur sayin, but this is text battling, verbal battles we shuld keep it out in the streets, here, it's net stuff, ya kno? i guess if ya key-styled it than sorry for wat i said, lol, if i knew u were straight key-stylin it, then my critique is more soft now, heh

next time, take ur time

stay up

[Longway]

The battle ended with a KO before Alais's vote so Keeburna gets the win-- As far as off the dome and prewritten shit-- Ive always gone off the dome and whatever I put out in that session is what I put out. I will work on it as im typing it or whatever but normally I do it there at that moment. I always figured others were doing the same. But neither way is frowned upon you have 48 hours to post and you can do whatever you damn well please during that 48 hours

[Vega/Set]

lol i kno wut u mean sal...honestly wut i meant was ya do it off tha dome but u got 48 hours to see if its hot shit, u got 48 hours to make corrections, u got 48 hours to make lil adjustments...i didnt mean do alil a couple hours then sum another couple bars in this hour then finish it the next day....na hell na honestly i frown upon that i jus meant do it off the dome but make sure its everythang it can b, u ni66as got 48 hours to make it good so do it.....thats wut i meant wen i was sayin tha shit

[aLiAs R.I.P.08]

The battle ended with a KO before Alais's vote so Keeburna gets the win-- As far as off the dome and prewritten shit-- Ive always gone off the dome and whatever I put out in that session is what I put out. I will work on it as im typing it or whatever but normally I do it there at that moment. I always figured others were doing the same. But neither way is frowned upon you have 48 hours to post and you can do whatever you damn well please during that 48 hours

word up :thumbup: we're alike

except after i'm finished i make mines look pretty :gay:

[keeburna]

i come off the dome in every battle i spit in. i don't just sit around all day writing verses like this. from now on i am going to take my time and bring alot better quality with my rhymes. rev nice battle but we do need to step some shit up.

alias i've been absent for a while but i'm gonna get back into the swing of things and hopefully after challenging better opponents my rhymes will be more up to par. the pressure of going against a challenge brings the best out of me. thanks for the feedback and i'll wor on it all.