Hollow vs Eddie Scissors Finals

[Lax115]

Just Because Lucky's Back Doesn't mean that i'm not gonna do it :-D

Open Written Finals

56 lines

Both verses must be posted before Aug. 20 11:59pm EST

Winner becomes the first ever Open Written Champion

Good luck

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[NorthStar]

Hollow Eddie?

Guys ya need to finish this tourny or tha title will be open still....72 hours to drop somethin'

[Eddie Scissors]

damn i just now saw this...ill write somethin if hollow comes and checks in. Don't want to write another verse to a no show.

[Lax115]

Hollow Eddie?

Guys ya need to finish this tourny or tha title will be open still....72 hours to drop somethin'

Or will be given to Lax

On second thought, next POTM will win it if no one writes a verse

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[Eddie Scissors]

If you want to stop me - you are gonna need lessons - can you follow fast?
You'll learn in one verse what you would in a semester of college class
So will hollow pass?
He needs to study more
Before they find him spread on a bloody floor - forehead mashed
Penetrated by a fucking fork - anger lashed from Hells port
Signals crash

Symbols flash in the silent sky
You made a violent try - but you only trickled past - you fell short
Skin flush you're a shameful guy
You might of started high - but it didn't last

You gonna swing that sword?
Man your time is up
Plus your timing is off - You ain't mighty enough
Your rhyming is soft - Not sharpened to cut
Or Shiny enough - I'm markin' you up

You ain't a titan at all
Tighten your jaw before I knock it clean off
You're gonna need a week off - won't be rappin' or writin' at all
You are the type that hides in a stall when I'm washin' my hands
You see blood in the sink while you frightened to fall

Pick you're shit off the floor, damn.
I thought you were more of a man than sitting in your own manure Dan'
That is your name right?
I'm a call you Dan anyways cuz' it's my damn right

Anyways - I could take your soul in plenty ways
Spread out all your limbs in twenty graves - It's funny Dave
You have a funny name

You've probably never been given dome
When it comes to runnin' game - you're pigeon toed
You are so typical you probably drive a civic bro
Never once came with an intrinsic flow
You want to get physical - but did you ever pass physics though?

Your life is full of so many pits - it's pitiful

You're so murkable
And man I really hate to get personal
But when it comes to battle - I'd be a fool to be merciful
I'll put you in the deep end with the rest - Then I'll stir the pool
And then this game's done - It's time to let the curtains pull
Hollow's just another name son

I've got a journal full

[Hollow]

Ed, be honest; there's no competition on who's the better artist/
Your best is harmless; ain't no stoppin me when I start and select a target/
My equal? Somethin that you far from; a fuckin BITCH? You R1/
Lucky, you R2, I charred you, I'll charge you BOTH for puttin up a hard front/
First time, Eddie got L1; this is L2, your chances fell through, you disadvantaged, dawg/
Ya too fake; it's doom's day, and I got bars on books, tapes An'a'Log/
Let em loose, rapid-fire, this faggot's dyin, head-sniped like punches are metal-jackets/
I sent shots up, down, left, right--so you gon' need EVERY-direction-PADDED!/
Ya team's a lame crew, with onion personas--they got more layers than three eskimos/*
An my squad'll circle his square triangle, then X 'em out like P.S. controls!/
I'd say let's play, but Ed's lame, an this ain't bed-games, here I don't fuck wit' bitches/
You actin rider, but if you hard then why only toddlers and retards run wit' Scissors?/
If ya won't do it to save a loss, walk away for ya name's sake/
Cause boy, you don't have any audibles.. and I done studied ya game tapes/
This is plain rape, and face to face, he'd fuckin jet/
That's why VETS praise MY name, and YOUR name's a name that none respect!/
Remember my line about Lucky bein trash? The fact's you ain't even HALF that!/
You gotta journal fulla names? Lemme see 'em; yep... People that I've LAUGHED at/
Fuck a piece of paper, your name ain't worth the ink it'd waste, cause you not SHIT/
My name's Bryant-- Question my life? Here's my girl and fam, so man up to what you got, bitch!?/
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(As far as the last couple bars, there were no rules about flips/feeds. Spare me the complaints, if anyone has em)
Only bar I think some of you might over look is "plain rape" == Plane Rape/Fuckin Jet.

Oh shit, 26 bars left.... Let's switch it up....

Every night I wake up from them glowin eyes/
Open up my closet, push them clothes aside/
To a stack bones this size, skulls this high/
I start relivin the past, and it blows my mind/
Take a breath, eyes closed an' hold it tight/
Not knowin why I feel this cold inside /
Really, it's no surprise; I lived my life so crookedly/
There was no denyin, an you could see it every time you looked at me/
Thinkin all about it makes my head just spin/
But now I finally understand why you left back then/
Cause to me the only pain worse than the taste of them tears/
Was what I saw lookin back at me from that face in the mirror/
I could feel his hate bubblin, the way that he gazed, hungry/
The more I tried to scare him away, the less he was afraid of me/
Did my best to push through it, barely kept focused/
Askin' how, in a four-bedroom house, I felt homeless?/
I didn't know how to cope when you chucked ya deuces/
And went back to usin dope for two months, like screw it.../
...Won't tell you the rest, just know in her arms is where my "Heaven"'s at/
Cause not only did I get my fam... I even got my reflection back/

Yea... I'd have drug that verse out a bit, but I need sleep...

[Eddie Scissors]

anyone got some votes for us?

[Olorin]

yeah, i do. well, long reads both of them, took me some time... eddie, i like the way you write man, your flow and structure is good and not tiring at all. you also had some nice wordplays there against hollow. i enjoyed your verse. hollow now... you came with your aggressive flow and sarcastic lyrics again, i love them... the line saying "Remember my line about Lucky bein trash? The fact's you ain't even HALF that!/" was terrific. don't think that the pics were nesecary (sorry if i spelled it wrong... i still ahve trouble with this word) but hey, it proves your point i guess. your second part is way different, and imo doesn't fit with the first one... you got me confused there a little. i enjoyed it though. but mainly because of your first one, you get my vote. hollow gets my vote. both of you did very well, it was really close if you ask me.

[Eddie Scissors]

There are thinsg I don't like about Hollows verse but the whole fucking playstation metaphor is fucking really well written. I mean that shit takes talent. When it comes to writing "Raps," Hollow really knows what he is doing. I write more poetry and songs than raps. It may take you a couple times to reread hollows verse to get that shit but...

My equal? Somethin that you far from; a fuckin BITCH? You R1/
Lucky, you R2, I charred you, I'll charge you BOTH for puttin up a hard front/
First time, Eddie got L1; this is L2, your chances fell through, you disadvantaged, dawg/
Ya too fake; it's doom's day, and I got bars on books, tapes An'a'Log/
Let em loose, rapid-fire, this faggot's dyin, head-sniped like punches are metal-jackets/
I sent shots up, down, left, right--so you gon' need EVERY-direction-PADDED!/
Ya team's a lame crew, with onion personas--they got more layers than three eskimos/*
An my squad'll circle his square triangle, then X 'em out like P.S. controls!/

that shit right there is some of the dopest shit I have ever seen as far as battle rapping and punchlines go. Haha just going through every button on a playstation controller.

"my squad will circle his square triangle"

haha that shit is funny

Hopefully we get some more votes. I just wanted to tell you how much I like those lines. The pictures and last verse weren't nearly as great, but when it comes to writin' raps, I don't think I'm quite on your level. Not to say I couldn't beat you in a battle, but you know what I'm saying. Just wanted to let you know how much I liked the playstation metaphor.

[Lax115]

Whoa Hollow does it again. Eddie love the structure and flow and the verse is witty and has some cool wordplay and multis but hollow went in with that playstation metaphor which was :O. However those last couple of bars really brought the verse down. But all in all, Hollow gmv

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[shaddowpuppet]

hollow was disgusting on this battle the flow punchlines and lyrics were all on point

[FrastyProphets]

Yea Hollow def won this one assault after assault after assault after assault after bitch smack after assault lol i hope i really dont have to break it down ...not to say eddie gots notalent but you should make yours stuff more realistic all that soul stealin shit heart eating and grave filling shit takes away from your verse the way you set it up reminds me of how i used too the form looks like stanzas as opposed to a verse but yea jus make it more realistic and try to look for a weakness and build concepts about it in your verse

[Hollow]

Wow! Most votes a battle's gotten here in a LONG ass minute! ^_^

Well, now that the voting's done, I don't feel like I'd be steppin outta line to explain a couple things people've mentioned.


As far as the posted up links I did, Eddy called my out about my life "drivin a civic, have you ever gotten head, etc." so, I really couldn't flip that on him without provin what I got in my life. SO yea, I felt I kinda had to , in order to make the bars work


Now, more importantly, I noticed a few of you weren't feelin the second verse I did. That's cool, but the thing is, this was an "open written" championship. In other words, basically free-writing. And, I felt that like I should give more than just a battle verse performance. I wanted to demonstrate a broader range. Battle and conceptual piece, feel me? Anyway, I do agree though--wasn't feelin it a lot.

[Lax115]

So at the end of the day...

Our first Open Written Champion is.............. Hollow

Congrats

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