Shaddowpuppet vs Krazie Killah (topical)

[K®åz΀_K‡LLåH™]

It was a moment in time where the moment was right--
Every soldier aligned next to a king the moment they fight--
Perfidy the minds across trenches just to meet they fate with mines--
A place where lies serves the only purpose to destroy these lives--
Who are waiting within- the realm of hope to see they wives--
But the government signs ya death certificate before ya die--
Just walk the lines and soon ya find large scale disasters--
Atrocities, Genocide, slave labor- just another form of cancer--
Inevitably rampant, trumped by generals who refuse to answer--
The investigation reports, of Bangladesh and operation storm--
Conceived to scorn, those who believe the ways we conform--
The wages of war- political propaganda that religion contorts-
Bits and pieces that tore- through lives left naked on shores--
The reason I mourn, as I shoot 5 generals for they reason for war--
Derived from imperious agendas, plutocracies the reason they send us--
To get raped with more, hardships burdened on people who aint die'n--
Who are sweatin n cryin- disposin they freedom for a hand of diamonds--
Covered with the blood from the hands of slaves who find em--
In a place where they plan- vicious acts to those who exploit them!!!

[shaddowpuppet]

We destroy other countries--but cant find wmds
he deployed our soldiers--i say we burn him like trees
bush needs to worry less--about alien deporting
a few told us--where bin laden was through water-bording
but its hush hush--no rush to stop the terrorism
we abuse here--and refuse to cruise clear to willin
to fight it aint right u send the wrong message overseas
afraid to take flight was raised right but who sees
the mistakes made that cost graves the government lost slaves
but be patient--i'm comin in the form an undercover agent
to break down the country--and to save it
but we funding all our enemies--i cant take it
now we running home empty handed im going ape-shit
face it--usa has been running on some poor minds
so i make war rhymes to expose these war crimes

[shaddowpuppet]

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[Hollow]

My analysis would go something like this...

In terms of the "angle", I definitely prefer Krazie's verse. It was more broad, and it managed to encompass a large amount of content (of course he had 4 more bars, too). Moreso than that though, I knew one of you would use Shadow's approach the instant I saw the topic in the call out thread--bash America's war-effort. It was too expected, too common--that took away from the shock-value that a topic like this uses to make it awe an audience.

And, to be honest, I felt Krazie was more on point with "war crimes," while Shadow's was more on the topic of "Bush declared war for bad reasons" and "alien deporting" and that sorta shit. In other words, I felt yours was more like a "poor politics" or "misguided war" rather than crimes commited by the soldiers in the war (which is what war-crimes actually are).

In terms of lyrics, flow and that: I'd say it probably has to go to Shadow--barely. As far as flow itself, I really don't know--this was tied. As far as rhymes go, it was definitely a tie... none were that impressive, they were nearly ALL single-syllable. Some of the bars didn't even RHYME (not even an in-out rhyme).

I'm giving that category to Shadow just based on the fact he had only one or two lines that didn't rhyme.


SO... with that bein said, because this is a topical battle, and I feel Krayzie was the only one that actually hit the topic, I'ma give it to Kray (though if Shadow'd been a little more on track with the concept, he'd have this in my opinion).

Krayzie.

[NorthStar]

Alright..

MVGT Krazie

Heres why....

In a way both had decent verses..Krazie was better structure wise and did hit tha topic better. Shaddows verse wasn't bad and I can't hate on it..but it wasn't as clean as KK..